Autumn Writing

We Are Learning about Autumn. We wrote our ideas in a solo describe map. After that we put them into sentences. And after that we went through a process of making our paragraph better. We highlighted the adjectives yellow, the similes pink and our favourite sentence green.

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Favourite

7.3.2016       Autumn

1.Attempt: Leaves fall from the trees. It gets colder in Autumn. There are also longer nights, as well as shorter days. The sun goes down earlier and we also have daylight saving.

2.Attempt: Small brown leaves fall from the tall trees. It also gets much colder because winter is coming. There are longer dark nights and shorter bright days because the yellow sun gown earlier. We have daylight saving to help us with our daily routine.

3.Attempt: Small brown leaves of all shapes and sizes fall from the tall brown trees. It also gets colder and windier in Autumn because winter is coming. There are longer black nights and shorter luminous days because the sun goes down earlier.We also have Daylight saving to assist our daily routine.

4.Attempt:  Small brown leaves of all shapes and sizes fall from the tall brown trees of the forest. It also gets colder and windier in Autumn because the freezing Winter is coming. There are longer black, dark nights and shorter luminous and bioluminescent days because the sun goes down earlier.We also have Daylight saving to assist our daily routine.

5. Attempt: Small multicoloured leaves of all shapes and sizes gracefully fall from the tall brown trees of the forest. It also gets colder and windier in Autumn because freezing Winter is coming.Autumn is Starting to get so cold that you see people with their white dragon breath. There are longer black, dark nights which are as dark as the feathers of a crow and shorter luminous and bioluminescent days that are as bright as a lightbulb because the sun goes down earlier, earlier than the crowing of the rooster.We also have Daylight saving to assist our daily routine.

Here is my final copy

  Here we are talking about an annual season about Autumn. Small multicoloured leaves of all shapes and sizes gracefully fall from the tall brown trees of the forest. It also gets colder and windier in Autumn because freezing Winter is coming. Autumn is Starting to get so cold that you see people with their white dragon breath. There are longer black, dark nights which are as dark as the feathers of a crow and shorter luminous and bioluminescent days that are as bright as a lightbulb because the sun goes down earlier, earlier than the crowing of the rooster.We also have Daylight saving to assist our daily routine.